Teacher Feedback on Second Draft:
Evidently, I was very happy with the feedback I received from my teachers. Above is an example of the feedback I received from one of my teachers after my second draft. This feedback was extremely useful as I had the ability to direct all of my focus on improving the negatives/suggested improvements. As a result of this, for my Third Draft, I shortened the initial clip of when my female protagonist and her male accompaniment are arguing in the kitchen so that the editing looked faster to portray the argumentative atmosphere of the situation in which they’re both endorsed in. Furthermore, for the section of my music video when the male protagonist is playing the guitar, I added in a new section of him getting a phone call and ignoring it. This was based on my teachers feedback in an attempt to keep the concentration on the narrative of the video. Furthermore, as suggested I shortened and removed some clips of my artist crumpling bits of paper in order to make the scene slightly shorter, more effective and less ‘static’. Finally, I shortened the final clip of when both protagonists step towards each other so that the smile was no longer seen. I also edited other sections of my video to make it slightly faster and more interesting.
Along with my constructive feedback received from my teachers, the feedback I received from my peers and family members were equally effective/useful in helping me reach my full potential. As referred to in many of the above posts, once I had filmed the appropriate sections and confirmed my ideas, I filled in the blank sections that many of the individuals above refer to. One individual, ‘Harrison Ledo’, refers to the potential use of the editing software ‘Magic Bullet’ in order to achieve ‘continuity in terms of lighting throughout’. This in particular, is one thing I’ll be focusing on when preparing my final draft as appropriate lighting will help bring all my sections effectively together (filming on different days meant that the lighting in some scenes alters). ‘Michael McCallum’, my brother, suggested using a ‘stabiliser’ on a few shots that have slightly too much movements or are ‘wobbly’ as others described. As a result of this, on PremierePro, as seen by comparing the same shots in my First vs Second Draft, I have effectively used a stabiliser which has vastly improved the quality and look of my overall production.
Generally, as seen by both my teachers and peers comments, the general impression seems good! They all seem really impressed with the originality (split-screen) and effectiveness of my productions. All in all, the feedback I have received has been catalytic in the formation of my Final Draft.